WRITING SAMPLE
Dear JJ,
That was a great message. Thank you for telling me how you send pictures
over e-mail. I was very curious about that.
I am not as stressed out now that I am at home doing my internships.
My
life is just not as busy now as it was in college. I was involved in a
lot
of clubs and other activities, and now I just do my internship during
the
day and have my evenings free. There are lots of things I do to reduce
my
stress. I enjoy listening to music. My favorite kind of music is "country".
What's your favorite kind? I like to cross-stitch, watch tv,
work on my scrapbook and write letters. At school, if I was really stressed
out, sometimes I'd go for a walk or a drive in my car. I don't play any
sports. I know how to swim and have sort of learned how to play tennis.
My sister is a runner and is very competetive. She runs 4 or 5 miles every
day. That's not my thing. When I was younger I played soccer in a summer
league with one of my sisters. My dad was our coach. I was the goalie.
It was fun but I was terrible. I know how to play the piano too. One of
my sisters and I used to take lessons. The teacher would come to our house
and teach us. We still have our piano, but I'm very rusty. I can usually
play the top hand of a song, but not the bottom hand.
Keep in touch! RH
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Dear RH,
I'm really sorry for forgetting to tell you how I can send the pictures
over
email. I save the pictures to my folder on my pc first. When I finish
writing an email by Outlook Express software, ("I") click "Insert",
and then
click "File Attchment". I have to look for the pictures that
I want to send.
Finally ("I") click "OK". This way I can send the
email with pictures. I
taught my father how to send or receive emails and how to send pictures.
That's why he can send pictures to me. (This was a wonderful paragraph!
You had so few errors!)
You are right. Liubiju pickle shop has been around for a long time. I
hope
you will get a chance to taste the pickles some day.
Today I "take" ("took") Ms. Kelly's class and "practice
to communicate" ("practiced communicating") with my friend.
The topic "is about how to reduce the stress" ("was how
to reduce stress"). The topic "is" ("was") interesting.
You must feel stressed at college too. How do you "reduce the
stress" ("reduce stress" or "reduce your stress")?
The one thing that "will
reduce" ("reduces") my stress is listening to music. The
way that my friend
"will reduce the stress" ("reduces her stress") is
("by") working ("out")
and doing exersice. Ms. Kelly says that I am a couch potato. I don't "like
to be a" ("like being a" or "want to be") couch
potato. I would like to do
exercises and improve ("my") self-image. I prefer to have a
friend who can
accompany me to "do exercises" ("exercise"). I "see
many students often go
to gym and want to join" ("often see many students going to
the gym and I want to join"). But I don't have a friend who like("s")
to go to "a" ("the") gym. So I don't go there. In
fact I like to exercise "my body" (don't need this). I wish
I could learn how to play tennis and how to swim and so on. Do you "like
to have a sport" ("play a sport" or "play any sports")?
Tomorrow is the night of the 15th of the 1st lunar month. It is a Chinese holiday "named" ("called") Lantern Festival. Usually people eat sweet dumpling("s") made of glutinous rice flour. "Did you hear" ("Have you heard") about that? I like to eat sweep dumpling("s"). Some contain black sesame, some contain sweet-scented osmanthus, some contain chocolate, "and etc" ("etc" or "and so on"). When I was little, I lift("ed") a lantern outside to celebrate the Festival ("of the") Lantern.
Tommorw evening from 6:00 p.m. to 10 p.m. I will practice piano at rehearsal.
I like to rehearse but I like to take piano lessons at ("a")
music school better. If there "is" ("was") a pinao
porformance major at RIT,
I would "like to" (don't need this) take "the" ("that")
major instead of
("the") applied computer technology major. But my father thinks
the major
related to computers is better than ("the") music major because
it "is easy"
("will be easier") for me to get a good job in the future. So
I "look the
pinao as amateurism" ("look at the piano as an amateur hobby").
I played
("the") piano for Ms. Kelly. If you are interested in it, I
would love to
play it for you. Have a good day!
Sincerely, JJ
*reduce stress: a very American expression that is used to mean reduce
stress is "destress". When I was in college at Geneseo, the
RAs used to
host "Destress Fests" which were like silly parties. We would
do all kind
of activities that were fun and not stressful. We had play-doh, coloring
books, finger paints, and bubble wrap to pop. Tell me if you don't know
what any of those things are.
*"work out": This can be a noun or a verb. A "work out"
is a noun, and
there are different types of workouts. Some people lift weights as their
workout, others take aerobics classes, other go swimming. "Working
out" as
a verb means exercising.
*sweet dumplings: This is a difficult concept to understand, but when
you
are talking about a class or group of foods, you need to refer to it as
a
plural. "I enjoy eating sweet dumplings." "I like pickles."
"I hate vegetables." If you are talking about a specific meal
and describing how
you ate one of something, then you can use the singular word. "For
lunch I
had a sweet dumpling and a pickle." Does this make any sense to you?
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Subject: joke
From: JJ
To: RH
CC: J. Kelly
Dear RH,
I'm sorry that my email was not clear, because I didn't know how to express,
so I made up the words. "blast music" and "crazy music",
mean the sound is like the sound of the colliding metals and also like
a drum. . "chorus music" is like the sound of many singers singing
together . I like country music. The spiral-power-spring frog means the
toy frog had a spring. When I tightened the clockwork spring, the frog
would move. My father knows little English. When he was at college, he
studied Russian language. When I e-mail back and forth with him, I often
write in Chinese. My conputer has a system of inputing Chinese word.
This midnight my friends asked me about computer homework via AIM. She
was frustrated and I helped her through AIM. After that it is almost 3:00
am.
Although I would like to help her but I don't like talking about homework
via AIM, because talking about homework is very slow and it takes me too
much time. I like talking something funny but not homework.
Anyway, I have a joke from my writing teacher. It is very funny. Let me
share it with you.. One day a woman likes to use the lipstick to cover
her
mouth, and then kisses the mirror in the bathroom. Kissing the mirror
is her
bad habit. There are many red marks that she kisses in the mirror. The
cleaner finds and then tries to clear the marks. But it is very hard to
clear them! Later the cleaner comes up with a good idea. She uses a mop
to
sweep the floor and then sweep the mirror. The woman sees doesn't dare
to kiss the mirror that the cleaner uses the mop to clean. are no
her red lipstick marks any more. What a clever cleaner and funny
joke.
haha..
Sincerely,
JJ
